Comment:

You have approached this essay and question in a very creative way, and many of the observations you have made about the differences between speaking and text messaging would provide you with a strong basis upon which to explore the language similarities and differences.

Your main area for improvement is in the lack of detail. What this means is reference to specific examples of language and the identification of specific named language devices. This kind of analytical essay requires that you dig deeply into the individual words and language techniques to support your points.

You will wish also to develop your written form by removing the use of the personal pronoun ‘I’, and instead putting your analysis forward in clear definitive statements.

Next time you prepare for a controlled assessment it will be essential that you re-read this feedback and provide me with practice writing that demonstrates that you’ve understand and adopted the advice written here. Please don’t hesitate to speak to me if you are uncertain of anything written here.