Living. That’s a hard thing to do in this type of world now. Knowing what it was like in the past when we had cars, the sun was out with no overly tall buildings blocking that sunlight everyday. Now on these days we get no sunlight, can’t meet new people because no one is ever on the streets or anywhere else. They’d rather be home to hide from the depressing look of our world or they’re just too busy in their flying cars to work or to buy food. My only goal in life is to change our world, for the better, for the best. So I’m at home (which is in a flat nearly as big as the Empire State Building) sitting on the sofa with a nice space. Funny enough the inside of everybody’s home seems to be the only nice looking thing in this world. As I just sit on the sofa I look at the window with a view that would of been great if there wasn’t a wide building blocking it. The way I fix that problem is by having holograms installed on my windows and having a custom made view. Usually I like to make it nice and sunny with a view monuments that London use to have before it was all destroyed. So I was just enjoying my view then I hear a knock on my door, I decide to ignore it because I really wanted to rest. Suddenly the knocking became louder and more aggressive by each knock. I still ignore it trying to wait it out but then there was shouting telling me to open the door or we’ll knock it down. I start to panic on the sofa not sure what to do. *bang* *bang* *bang* is all I hear on my door, so scared I can’t move. The door burst open. Evil standing there ready to attack staring me in the eye.
May 2, 2013 at 9:53 am
Some of those sentences need to be separated so that they make more sense and flow better. Also you need to work on your sentence structure in order to further advance your writing.
Rather than putting the information about the flat in the brackets it would be best if u actually described it in the writing instead.
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